Hi Sepideh,
Upon reading your post, I thought you were describing an existing city. This is due to your use of the present participle form of the verb “to be” (e.g., “has been built"). Even though this post is in the “Vision Statements” forum and the title is “dream urban”, you still need an introductory sentence that says this is your vision. Alternatively you could use the subjunctive or future form of the verb. For example: “every place in my city would be built” or “will be built”.
sepideh - 10 October 2008 07:27 AM
Everi place in my city has been built in the way that is conforming with human activities, so people have no problem for doing thise activities in their plac.
The urban elements has been placed in a part of city that with special activites. of course every place is flexible and have not been limited by special activitie, but it’s more suitable for particular activities and doing such thise activities faced with no problem.
In my city there is a various green space.
To be continued...............
A few questions on content:
What is the name of your city?
Can you give us a few examples of a place that is built in conformance with human activity?
Likewise, itemize the activities to which you refer.
I like your emphasis on flexibility. I agree that many spaces can be designed with multiple uses in mind.
Mechanical issues (grammar, spelling, etc.):
You have some spelling errors (in orange).
Verb conjugation is related to noun number, e.g., “elements have been placed” vs. “an element has been placed”. In contrast, ”every place...has not been limited” vs. ”some places...have not been limited”.
You have a few other errors highlighted above. I realize now that I should develop a color code for grammar errors.
