Dear Gilaneh,
Thanks for promising to post every week. I look forward to your thoughts on the field.
Here are my notes on your English:
gilaneh - 05 October 2008 09:05 AM
Hi my frends
From today ,I‘m going to write a post for my homework,every week .
I want you to know that I do’nt know English well, so maybe the post that I wrot,had a
problem & I want you to support me to improve my English from next week,
I’m going to talk about urbanism & every thing in this field.
I’m interested about your ideas…
This post was easy to understand and follow. You capitalized the first letter of all your sentences. Excellent!
“Friends” has an e in it. Also, I would capitalize all the words in the salutation: “Hello My Friends,”
You have the same habit of punctuation that the other students have. There is no space BEFORE the punctuation. There is one space after a comma and there are two spaces after a full stop.
The apostrophe in “don’t” comes after n. It takes the place of the letter “o” in the contraction of “do not”.
“Maybe the post that I wrot,had a problem” is awkward and unclear. “Wrote” has an e at the end.
After “problem” you put an “&” and started a new thought. A full stop would have been better there.
“From next week” is not necessary. Also, it’s unclear if you want the phrase to be the end of the sentence that precedes it, or the beginning of the sentence that follows.
“Everything” is one word.
Usually one is interested “in” ideas. We will cover prepositions in two weeks.
Thanks again for your post!
