moshksarparisa - 05 October 2008 08:41 AM
We consider Shiraz as a “Garden city”. But this isn’t what “Garden city” theory explains.Because today, we see many buildings are constructed in the gardens. Perhaps “Green city” is more suitable than “Garden city”.
Hi Parisa!
I’m not sure what we are agreeing with here. Are you asking us if we agree that Shiraz is not a “garden city” but a “green city”? You have not defined either of them. Are you saying that Shiraz is neither a garden city nor a green city? It seems that you are saying that people think that just because buildings are built within gardens in Shiraz, that makes it a “garden city”, but that this is incorrect.
Wow, I needed to break that sentence down!
Your post would be improved by adding outside information. To define “garden city theory”, you could easily quote an outside source. For example, It took me a minute or so to find the following definition from wikipedia:
Garden Cities may refer to:
* Cities designed using principles of the garden city movement
* Sustainable Ecocities that are an alternative to urban sprawl
* Retrofitted or new Pedestrian Villages utilizing the principles of New Pedestrianism
Make sure to put a link to the source.
For this post, you also need to define “green city” and explain the distinction between the two, if there is one.
Mechanical issues of writing:
Mind your punctuation!
Mind your use of articles:
“We consider Shiraz to be a “garden city”“; OR “We consider Shiraz a “garden city.””
“Today, many buildings are constructed in the gardens” implies that there are some specific gardens in which buildings are constructed. I suspect you are trying to say that buildings are built within gardens in general.
