Dear Sepideh,
Thanks for this post! Thanks for taking the initiative to begin drafting an urban vision statement. Please do elaborate!
Grammar notes:
sepideh - 04 October 2008 10:13 AM
My dream urban having this opthions:
It is safe.There is not disease in it , othere wise it will protect people from diseas.O-f
course it is not completly safe and the same,in order to humans experience danger in it.
My city is not completly silent,of course it is not busy and full of sounds.
there is sound which are desirable and agreeable and it is patianable,in or order to humans being sobered a bout their environment.
... to be continued....
The adjective comes before the modifier, e.g., “urban dream”, not “dream urban”.
“Having” doesn’t work here. Try, “My urban dream has the following features:” Or, “My urban dream features the following:”
You have the same punctuation and spacing issue that everyone seems to have. The rule is, no space before the punctuation, one space after a comma, two spaces after a full stop.
“There is no disease in it”, not “there is not disease in it.”
“Otherwise” is one word.
What do you mean by “otherwise it will protect people from disease”?
Your safety sentence has some structural issues. See content note below.
Think of a better word than “completely”.
OK, I’m tired. It will take a while to go through the last two sentences. I’m really not sure what you’re saying.
“Patianable” is not a word.
Content notes:
I like how you want people to experience danger. You seem to say here that the city should basically be safe, but not too safe because, on some level, danger is an asset.
